Elevator Pitch No. 2


A lot of the feedback I received on my first elevator pitch was positive. People liked my tone and how I presented my information, and that it was simple yet informative. One person said I had a good hook so I decided to stick with it. That specific feedback about the hook helped me out a lot because it originally took me a very long time to come up with a hook that was interesting yet relevant to the opportunity I had chosen.

I honestly did not change a lot from my first elevator pitch. I think it did a good job of getting the necessary information across and in a simple way. I did work on making it more natural; I feel like the first one I did came across as too rehearsed.

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  1. UnknownOctober 19, 2017 at 10:11 PM

    Hi Olivia,

    I think the fact that you did not feel the need to change a lot about your first elevator pitch says a lot about how you did on the first try. I think it was smart of you to leave your hook as I agree that it is a great way to get the listener's attention. I also felt that my first pitch was a little bit rehearsed, so I also tried to make my second one seem a little more natural and conversational and I think that is an important aspect of an elevator pitch. I agree that keeping things simple and to the point is important because you don't want the listener to get confused or bored. Great job with your second pitch!

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  2. UnknownOctober 23, 2017 at 11:44 PM

    Hey Olivia,

    I think its great that you received positive feedback and then made an effort to keep the things people liked replicated in this video. I like that you pointed out what you tried to change, so as a viewer we can take notice of what you are trying to work on. I also think you did sound more natural in this video and great job.

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